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On the road, swiftly traveling
onward to a life where I could live
without it continuously unraveling.
On this road, I gradually slowed,
As I neared a man who instantly bowed.
Blue eyes glancing into mine,
I instantly thought oh, how fine
He took my hand with a smile,
and led me, blushing all the while,
to a new beautiful flower lined path.
Far away from the glaring aftermath
of a most destructive past.
My angel, always here to save,
and whom my soul will always crave.
To you I give this fragile heart,
I know that you won't tear it apart.
Bow again, and take my hand,
And lead me across this bight new land.
©2009 ~lovingdream
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new style. kinda taken forever to write something but let me know what you think!

comments are always appriciated!

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:iconrikufanattic:
I really do love the flow in this, and it's so sweet, it brings back all the nice memories that I have with my mate right now:
"To you I give this fragile heart,
I know that you won't tear it apart."
that part really speaks to me.

This style works pretty well for you buddy!

You forgot to capitalize the 'f' in "far away..."

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Interested in cheap commissions? ~rikufanattic

He is my night, he gives me warmth and comfort and joy, and all the more emotions I never knew existed in love before.
:iconlovingdream:
thanks! for all of that. i like that part alot too. :) it makes me smile.

thanks! i fixed it now, i need to start rereading things before i post them lol

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hey, this is my writing account..my other account is ~HotChocolateTime

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